tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post3131907656593333451..comments2023-12-05T23:02:28.580-05:00Comments on Excursions and Diversions: Watchtower DreamsSteve Kinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04818671944215117618noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-12788754096531783142014-04-03T12:18:43.193-04:002014-04-03T12:18:43.193-04:00I like "campfires are decoys." This is ...I like "campfires are decoys." This is kind of haunting and epic. Colleen@Looseleafnoteshttp://www.looseleafnotes.com/2014/03/20274/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-14036576082422667632014-04-02T08:34:58.299-04:002014-04-02T08:34:58.299-04:00I feel a Trojan horse lurking or at least the surp...I feel a Trojan horse lurking or at least the surprise attack. Beautiful poem about the wish for peace, the wanting to trust, the campfire and the pipe dream. I especially like the phrasing of the first two lines where there is a little ambiguity as to who is keeping watch-- death or the guard! That beginning especially moving. And of course the enormity of the struggle-- the thought of his beloved. Manicddaily k. Outlawyerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698845661756444061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-60147569596503116082014-04-01T19:27:15.254-04:002014-04-01T19:27:15.254-04:00A timeless, mythical quality in this masterful wri...A timeless, mythical quality in this masterful write. Bravo, Steve! ~jackie~Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-64069316107332215722014-04-01T12:41:15.988-04:002014-04-01T12:41:15.988-04:00I love the timeless feel of this piece. Am somewha...I love the timeless feel of this piece. Am somewhat left hanging in suspense by your last three lines. What does the man in the watchtower see? What causes pause and interrupts his observations? An excellent piece of writing, my friend!Ginny Brannanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15298060016652737538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-15289239812204682202014-04-01T05:34:22.130-04:002014-04-01T05:34:22.130-04:00The quiet triumph here on a field at night by the ...The quiet triumph here on a field at night by the sea makes me believe in postmodernity--after the fall, after the gods, after the epics -- but it's never resolved, is it, Helen's never quite where we thought she'd be. Thank Heaven -- what else would we have to write about? A fine rein of meter and sound here.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-72956289296256002562014-03-31T19:50:03.711-04:002014-03-31T19:50:03.711-04:00This is an amazing poem filled with sadness..the w...This is an amazing poem filled with sadness..the watch tower of dreams..I feel like this is a place somewhere in between light and dark, hope and defeat..life and death.."I will have dawn"..we all desire dawn..Truedessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09079953417572207613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-61454869710169650662014-03-31T14:04:28.853-04:002014-03-31T14:04:28.853-04:00I could not help but consider the passengers on an...I could not help but consider the passengers on and families of the missing Malaysian airliner. You give them voice.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12460881702249079009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-55932829781562985622014-03-31T12:58:45.723-04:002014-03-31T12:58:45.723-04:00Kerry,
I had in mind a different war--perhaps the ...Kerry,<br />I had in mind a different war--perhaps the last moment of Troy. Thanks for the thoughtful comment.<br />Steve K.Steve Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04818671944215117618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-64685507085649726842014-03-31T12:08:17.224-04:002014-03-31T12:08:17.224-04:00There is beauty in the sadness of this poem....To ...There is beauty in the sadness of this poem....To look upon war and take the mind from death seems impossible, but we do it to preserve our sanity. Your poems speaks to me of watching my daughter fight disease and my efforts to not dwell on what could happen,Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-23679396948494298492014-03-31T09:28:38.001-04:002014-03-31T09:28:38.001-04:00Your poem puts me in mind of some of the best of W...Your poem puts me in mind of some of the best of World War 1 poetry - though your particular scenario is not clearly defined as a battlefield. There is the sense of loss or division from loved one and uncertainty too, of ever making it back home. Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-25349645080202058802014-03-31T09:17:40.072-04:002014-03-31T09:17:40.072-04:00The sea is a beautiful metaphor but its dark might...The sea is a beautiful metaphor but its dark might & emptiness can be terrifying, a death watch ~<br /><br />I like the inner conversation at the end with dawn as a bride , though it is full of sadness ~ Love your writing Steve ~<br /><br />Happy Monday ~Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.com