tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post7718860337732328629..comments2023-12-05T23:02:28.580-05:00Comments on Excursions and Diversions: Rush Hour U-TurnsSteve Kinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04818671944215117618noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-83729551555699293932013-11-09T19:27:48.253-05:002013-11-09T19:27:48.253-05:00Is all travel illusion? All stops and starts only ...Is all travel illusion? All stops and starts only in the mind's creation here in the physical world? I have no idea.<br /><br />But this poem made me feel I was in heavy traffic.<br /><br />And now I'm parking the car and going to enjoy a nice quiet walk in the forest. :)<br /><br />xoJannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-18705110897121217192013-11-06T18:00:37.654-05:002013-11-06T18:00:37.654-05:00"You are hurtling,
one stop to the next,
on a..."You are hurtling,<br />one stop to the next,<br />on and on,<br />a faint, elusive point<br />perpetually gone,<br />arrival and departure synonyms,<br />reciprocating echoes<br />melded in the vacuum of transit."<br /><br />Loved this, especially the first stanza! Of course I read it through twice without even reading the title. This could be about transportation, but even more so about our lives in general, hurtling through time and space--where will we land next. Especially like your formatting at the end, adds to the build up and anticipation. Well penned, my friend, well penned! <br />FYI: Did not post for OLN this week--been exceptionally busy with both job & home, not enough time to share & visit. Maybe next week :-)<br /><br />Ginny Brannanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15298060016652737538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-75849122230696280362013-11-06T14:43:29.398-05:002013-11-06T14:43:29.398-05:00how your travelling takes you forward... on this l...how your travelling takes you forward... on this linear track.. like life itselfbrudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-31524868571887098912013-11-06T08:14:35.907-05:002013-11-06T08:14:35.907-05:00I felt both the rushing on and the waiting
there i...I felt both the rushing on and the waiting<br />there is only time, no perfectionHisFireFlyhttp://hisfirefly.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-40579053432345286592013-11-05T22:40:52.588-05:002013-11-05T22:40:52.588-05:00Nice! It felt intense & jerky & flying for...Nice! It felt intense & jerky & flying forward to me. Well done! :-)Kate Solohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06703901149715024366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-31961779696016101262013-11-05T20:37:24.914-05:002013-11-05T20:37:24.914-05:00I like the theme of time and the decisions that we...I like the theme of time and the decisions that we make and that molds our life.ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-91481805517436770902013-11-05T19:07:01.225-05:002013-11-05T19:07:01.225-05:00Love the second stanza, in particular...."the...Love the second stanza, in particular...."the ready stylus of your fickle needs"....brilliant! Love the entire poem...and one of the best, I think, I've read on concept of time and how we choose to deal with it. ~jackie~Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-79762351604059059942013-11-05T18:39:48.558-05:002013-11-05T18:39:48.558-05:00I like the theme of time, moving from one point to...I like the theme of time, moving from one point to another ~ I think of rushing to meet deadlines or being impatient to move from one goal to the another ~ The ending format, I specially like ~ Good to see you Steve ~Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-66755095003124590542013-11-05T16:36:15.867-05:002013-11-05T16:36:15.867-05:00I like the build here, the feel of rush and decisi...I like the build here, the feel of rush and decision..which way to go, stop, get off..moves the reader at a quickened paceDorianna Ric (paintswithwords)https://www.blogger.com/profile/14784903538135226600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-67056909882540904402013-11-05T16:32:03.133-05:002013-11-05T16:32:03.133-05:00The intensity of it all can be so maddening at tim...The intensity of it all can be so maddening at times.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-89999503820054857082013-11-05T16:30:37.001-05:002013-11-05T16:30:37.001-05:00Ruussshhhhh. I loved this ride and how it symboli...Ruussshhhhh. I loved this ride and how it symbolizes other choices. Stop. Turn. Calculation and Instinct, yes. Mostly a feel for it, trusting experience.Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-64505515771872984252013-11-05T16:23:58.446-05:002013-11-05T16:23:58.446-05:00Tense and imperative. Oh, how I hate driving in c...Tense and imperative. Oh, how I hate driving in city rush hour traffic. Linda Mhttp://lindamanning.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-6468397199687244332013-11-05T15:45:05.214-05:002013-11-05T15:45:05.214-05:00hopefully we take a little care in the moves we ma...hopefully we take a little care in the moves we make and where we choose to get off....i think we can see behind the ones we missed and hopefully it helps us recognize them in the future...i like how you did the end there steve...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-63886107933862960612013-11-05T15:29:22.576-05:002013-11-05T15:29:22.576-05:00And I should have said commute, or drive, as I dou...And I should have said commute, or drive, as I doubt subway cars take too many u-turns at rush hour, or any other time. ;_)hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8912094816780327975.post-10815729735101352282013-11-05T15:27:00.116-05:002013-11-05T15:27:00.116-05:00I like the questions you ask in this, which seem t...I like the questions you ask in this, which seem to be about more than just the subway ride, but rather what brings us to it, exactly what makes up the experience.Starts and ends and stops are the peripherals of the journey, the substance is the part in between. I especially like how the structure picks up pace, with just a catch of breathlessness by the end, but 'You are used to taking chances here...' after all. A lot of immediacy to this one, Steve. Good stuff.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.com