Survivors

Survivors

Tuesday, February 28, 2012

Winter Stars


by Steve King
©  2012  All rights reserved


The sky is low with winter clouds.
I cannot see the stars;
my upturned face
at least may touch the winter sky.

I was told each star
is an unclaimed wish:
the heavens’ brilliance
a mosaic pavement
marking paths for derelict desire.

Such promises mean little.
Wishes are more free than stars—
there are longings to outweigh
a universe of light.

I have always held a star apart.
Should I see another one tonight
I know where I would ground its waiting wish.

Soon the earth will shift its heavy airs,
just the way your guarded eyes do change
to capture the next mood.

Then will the winter sky alight…

And then might old desires at last intrude.

Then shall wishes rain from winter stars.


17 comments:

  1. Really liked the shift at the end
    Can wait for that trend
    As the mood with shift
    And no more snow rift.

    ReplyDelete
  2. Star light, star bright... don't think any did come true now that you mention it. The guarded eyes line was my fav.

    ReplyDelete
  3. Beautiful winter and stars ~ I enjoyed the shift from earth to guarded eyes ~ I hope your wishes come true ~

    ReplyDelete
  4. nice..i much like the idea of each star being an unclaimed wish...let's claim them and shift the clouds..smiles

    ReplyDelete
  5. your piece was up and close to the stars... Twinkle, twinkle has a new meaning... nice write

    ReplyDelete
  6. smiles...i still make wishes on stars...really nice steve...touching the winter sky a bit...i hope yours come true...

    ReplyDelete
  7. The language here is sweet, Steve--esp "I know where I would ground its waiting wish..." that just leaped out at me. All the alliterative phrases are excellent--derelict desire..but also each individual picture you're drawing. Fine work.

    ReplyDelete
  8. LOVE, LOVE, LOVE! the last line. All of it, the shift, the night sky, beautiful...but I will not deny that I caught a glimpse of hell fire raining down! ;)

    ReplyDelete
  9. Beautiful write...I love these lines..I was told each star
    is an unclaimed wish:
    the heavens’ brilliance
    a mosaic pavement
    marking paths for derelict desire.- Excellent :)

    ReplyDelete
  10. I have to ask---are you also a song writer or have you ever been? I swear to God I could hear the acoustics to this song/poem. Brilliant line breaks, the end got me good--the way it felt and sounded and read--your ear for sounds is exceptional!
    Amy

    ReplyDelete
  11. Your wonderful words captured me again. I can never read your poems just once, but must read several so that I can sink into them, feel them, absorb the words. Especially love the last 6 lines in this:

    "Soon the earth will shift its heavy airs,
    just the way your guarded eyes do change
    to capture the next mood.

    Then will the winter sky alight…

    And then might old desires at last intrude.

    Then shall wishes rain from winter stars."

    A shift, more metaphorical than literal I think. Just lovely.

    ReplyDelete
  12. What a lovely romance you have with the stars, Steve. I like the notion of each star as an unclaimed wish. Should you see another star, I hope you do ground that waiting wish. ...wishes raining from stars...love that! Sweet words, all ..but certainly not cloying...all of it. Beautiful write :))

    ReplyDelete
  13. This is lovely, Steve. I especially like:

    Soon the earth will shift its heavy airs,
    just the way your guarded eyes do change
    to capture the next mood.

    ReplyDelete
  14. We sit and wish...a beautiful poem of stars.

    ReplyDelete
  15. As an amateur astronomer, I felt you were writing from my perspective. Beautiful.

    ReplyDelete
  16. Wishes are more free than stars—
    there are longings to outweigh
    a universe of light.

    So true this, and so beautifully put.

    ReplyDelete
  17. This is just a beautiful poem. The longing and hope are so strong and sweet (and almost painful), and then the actual physical description is so beautiful too. Thanks very much. Wonderful work. K.

    I am having a huge problem with blogger, so I am using a blogger blog, but it's not one I actually write on! Mine is at wordpress--http://Manicddaily.wordpress.com

    ReplyDelete